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Offline Karin

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I am over the Moon!
« on: May 07, 2010, 09:57:14 AM »
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CaliforniaPeggy  (1000+ posts)        Thu May-06-10 05:20 PM
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I am over the moon! 
 These two are being published.

Be happy with me!


End of Day

Thin lavender clouds cover the graying sky
someone spread
them with a butter knife
and then forgot

the sunlight fades
all is obscure
to my dim
vision

too soon the sun is gone
I wanted it to stay

it moves away
it takes the light
from me

it leaves me in
darkness

where did you
go


The Wind

ruffled my hair
touched my face


the sun
warmed

me
your smile

brilliant



a tear
slid
from

my

eye


© 2010 MLC
 

My dear CCers, the comments that followed are the same as all the other poetry threads, you know how it goes.

This chick showed up, so we know she hasn't been blown to smithereens or butchered for dinner:

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hippywife  (1000+ posts)        Thu May-06-10 08:02 PM
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24. A million congrats, Peg!
 You should be very pleased with yourself and your talent, darlin'. 
 
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 CaliforniaPeggy  (1000+ posts)        Thu May-06-10 08:46 PM
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37. My dear hippywife! 
 Honestly, I stand in awe of it...

NO idea where this came from!

Thank you! 
 

Oh come on!  You stand in awe of it?? 

This was kinda funny:

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NNadir  (1000+ posts)        Thu May-06-10 09:50 PM
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45. Congrats Peg. Where are you being published? 
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  CaliforniaPeggy  (1000+ posts)        Thu May-06-10 10:29 PM
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49. Thanks, my dear NNadir! (NT)
   :-)

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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #1 on: May 07, 2010, 10:03:58 AM »
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I am over the Moon!

Some comedy just writes itself.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #2 on: May 07, 2010, 10:18:47 AM »
Somebody oughta moon her . . . sheesh, what a load of puke!  :puke:
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #3 on: May 07, 2010, 10:26:03 AM »
Published where?  Rolls of toilet paper don't count.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #4 on: May 07, 2010, 10:27:50 AM »
Isn't it pitiful?

BTW these are getting published somewhere out of this country and she will not be getting paid for them. She left that part out. rofl.

I think people are so fooled by her that they comment on her stuff to make her feel better. At least that is what I hope because her poetry sucks.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #5 on: May 07, 2010, 10:36:20 AM »
Whoa whoa whoa

where is the obligatory TLB critique?
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #6 on: May 07, 2010, 10:37:38 AM »
Are they being published in a different language in a different country?
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #7 on: May 07, 2010, 10:42:35 AM »
Quote from: NHSparky on May 07, 2010, 10:26:03 AM
Published where? 

Down at the local Kinkos.......

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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #8 on: May 07, 2010, 10:45:56 AM »
Quote from: IassaFTots on May 07, 2010, 10:37:38 AM
Are they being published in a different language in a different country?

It is a British magazine.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #9 on: May 07, 2010, 10:50:26 AM »
Quote from: soleil on May 07, 2010, 10:45:56 AM
It is a British magazine.

An actual ink on paper magazine?

Must be some kind of subsidized rag.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #10 on: May 07, 2010, 10:53:02 AM »
Quote from: FGL on May 07, 2010, 10:50:26 AM
An actual ink on paper magazine?

Must be some kind of subsidized rag.

I think it is called Decanto.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #11 on: May 07, 2010, 11:27:06 AM »
Oh lawdy- this woman(?) needs to get a grip. 
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #12 on: May 07, 2010, 11:45:24 AM »
I sure wish you guys would warn us the thread is CalPig's poetry! Geez, there's 3 minutes I'll never get back!
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #13 on: May 07, 2010, 01:37:08 PM »
Quote from: AllosaursRus on May 07, 2010, 11:45:24 AM
I sure wish you guys would warn us the thread is CalPig's poetry! Geez, there's 3 minutes I'll never get back!

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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #14 on: May 07, 2010, 02:02:23 PM »
Quote from: soleil on May 07, 2010, 10:53:02 AM
I think it is called Decanto.

I thought it was called Angel Soft because her poetry needs to be flushed
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #15 on: May 07, 2010, 02:12:15 PM »
Quote from: littlelamb on May 07, 2010, 02:02:23 PM
I thought it was called Angel Soft because her poetry needs to be flushed

That would be a waste of good toilet paper.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #16 on: May 07, 2010, 02:14:17 PM »
My wife dabbles in Poetry. There are websites you can post it to and get feedback from other Poets. She appreciates the input.
Every so often one of hers get "selected" to be "published" by some Dead Poets society or other. Of course you have to be a member for X amount of dollars. Surprisingly that membership allows you to buy the book with your poem in it for even more money.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #17 on: May 07, 2010, 02:14:59 PM »
Quote from: soleil on May 07, 2010, 02:12:15 PM
That would be a waste of good toilet paper.


Just use her poetry then.




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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #18 on: May 07, 2010, 02:17:47 PM »
Quote from: MarshallLaw on May 07, 2010, 02:14:59 PM

Just use her poetry then.






It is crap for sure. She thinks she is so sophisticated.  :rotf:
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #19 on: May 07, 2010, 02:53:58 PM »
I had one published about 20 or so years ago. It had "night" in it too, but it just doesn't have the...rhythm (?)... that Peg's has.

Here it is...

The Seventh Night

Evening's lights were never alone.
Unnoticed never were moonbeams gone.
Melodies of fantasia in hearts at play
desiring the morn to stay away.
November chills gripping the air.
On the seventh night coming to care.
Orion watching from black velvet above
over the lonely learning to love.
The darkness so deep and yet so bright
too soon gave way to morning light.
The feelings for one now gone away.
For the other forever will they stay.
May the love found under lunar light
return to life once more some night.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #20 on: May 07, 2010, 02:59:50 PM »
Quote from: ChuckJ on May 07, 2010, 02:53:58 PM
I had one published about 20 or so years ago. It had "night" in it too, but it just doesn't have the...rhythm (?)... that Peg's has.

Here it is...

The Seventh Night

Evening's lights were never alone.
Unnoticed never were moonbeams gone.
Melodies of fantasia in hearts at play
desiring the morn to stay away.
November chills gripping the air.
On the seventh night coming to care.
Orion watching from black velvet above
over the lonely learning to love.
The darkness so deep and yet so bright
too soon gave way to morning light.
The feelings for one now gone away.
For the other forever will they stay.
May the love found under lunar light
return to life once more some night.


Very good.  I've had lyrics published.  I can't post those.  They're traceable. 
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #21 on: May 07, 2010, 03:19:50 PM »
Quote from: ChuckJ on May 07, 2010, 02:53:58 PM
I had one published about 20 or so years ago. It had "night" in it too, but it just doesn't have the...rhythm (?)... that Peg's has.

Here it is...

The Seventh Night

Evening's lights were never alone.
Unnoticed never were moonbeams gone.
Melodies of fantasia in hearts at play
desiring the morn to stay away.
November chills gripping the air.
On the seventh night coming to care.
Orion watching from black velvet above
over the lonely learning to love.
The darkness so deep and yet so bright
too soon gave way to morning light.
The feelings for one now gone away.
For the other forever will they stay.
May the love found under lunar light
return to life once more some night.


:clap: :clap: :clap:

Neighbor, that's pretty good.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #22 on: May 07, 2010, 03:53:42 PM »
Quote from: ChuckJ on May 07, 2010, 02:53:58 PM
I had one published about 20 or so years ago. It had "night" in it too, but it just doesn't have the...rhythm (?)... that Peg's has.

Here it is...

The Seventh Night

Evening's lights were never alone.
Unnoticed never were moonbeams gone.
Melodies of fantasia in hearts at play
desiring the morn to stay away.
November chills gripping the air.
On the seventh night coming to care.
Orion watching from black velvet above
over the lonely learning to love.
The darkness so deep and yet so bright
too soon gave way to morning light.
The feelings for one now gone away.
For the other forever will they stay.
May the love found under lunar light
return to life once more some night.


Very good! Do I detect some influence of William Blake? (That's a good thing.)

Meanwhile, and I'm not going to sugar coat it, the DUpe's poem (CaliforniaPeggy's)  made me yawn. I see these on the subway all the time. Boring and they don't show much work having gone into them, to me; it's barely a poem, just a few words stitched together. Too many modern poets seem to think unending sadness/darkness = good. Newsflash for that lot: AE Poe could pull that kind of thing off; you guys ain't EA Poe.

I'm not writing this because she's a lib and you're not. Those are my honest impressions of both poems.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #23 on: May 07, 2010, 04:29:31 PM »
Quote from: NHSparky on May 07, 2010, 10:26:03 AM
Published where?  Rolls of toilet paper don't count.


Some freak rag. They print every submission. I had the link somewhere.
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Re: I am over the Moon!
« Reply #24 on: May 07, 2010, 04:30:58 PM »
Quote from: Tucker on May 07, 2010, 04:29:31 PM

Some freak rag. They print every submission. I had the link somewhere.

Let me guess, if you buy a copy they'll print your crap?
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