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I have written my first crime novel

Ladies and gentleman I have written my first crime novel about a retired NCIS agent who is black who gets appointed sheriff of a small mid-western county built on racism. I will be pitching this on twitter in a couple of days. Please send me pleasant thoughts. My goal is to get not only a book deal but a film or TV deal out of it so I can buy myself a house with a working furnace. Send me your thoughts and prayers and if you happen to have connections in the business I could use that too.

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #1 on: September 06, 2016, 09:19:54 PM »
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #2 on: September 06, 2016, 09:20:26 PM »
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My goal is to get not only a book deal but a film or TV deal out of it so I can buy myself a house with a working furnace.

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #3 on: September 06, 2016, 11:15:26 PM »
I predict that CR's venture gets zero book, tv, or film offers and nets a whopping ZERO dollars in income.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #4 on: September 06, 2016, 11:16:42 PM »
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I have written my first crime novel

Ladies and gentleman I have written my first crime novel about a retired NCIS agent who is black who gets appointed sheriff of a small mid-western county built on racism. I will be pitching this on twitter in a couple of days. Please send me pleasant thoughts. My goal is to get not only a book deal but a film or TV deal out of it so I can buy myself a house with a working furnace. Send me your thoughts and prayers and if you happen to have connections in the business I could use that too.

Oh, for ****'s face. That is the lamest sludgepit of copycat crap I have ever read.

Wasn't this DUmbshit strutting around last year about some screenplay deal? Must have fallen through.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #5 on: September 07, 2016, 01:53:20 AM »
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if you happen to have connections in the business I could use that too.

The only connections I have are to certain individuals in a county prosecuting attorney's office. 

Since your writing is most likely criminally bad, would you still like me to refer you?

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #6 on: September 07, 2016, 02:51:02 AM »
The only connections I have are to certain individuals in a county prosecuting attorney's office. 

Since your writing is most likely criminally bad, would you still like me to refer you?

If I didn't mind becoming violently ill, I'd almost like to read this.....

...if it exists.   :wink:
              

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #7 on: September 07, 2016, 04:48:28 AM »
It sounds like if 'Blazing Saddles' were a modern drama.
Libs really do see racism everywhere they look.

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #8 on: September 07, 2016, 06:21:57 AM »
It sounds like if 'Blazing Saddles' were a modern drama.
Libs really do see racism everywhere they look.

Or some crappy redo of a '70s era 'Blaxploitation' film.. (Superfly, Shaft, Blackula.. etc )

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #9 on: September 07, 2016, 06:31:50 AM »
Racism? Why not re-conceive the retired black guy as a semi-retired fiction writer who moves to a nearly all-white touristy coast town like Aptos, or Eureka in CA or Florence in OR? A black unofficial detective newcomer and an all-white PD or Sheriff Dept. (plus or minus a token minority) would be perfect for the de rigueur conflict between the smart detective and dumb local LEOs. With that set-up CR just needs a good mix of villains and villainous victims (the latter getting long-delayed 9mm karma) in various forms such as a greedy developer wanting to pave Paradise, a loony-hypocrite Fundy preacher, or a local businessman dumping industrial waste for fun and profit (all whites, all racists, of course).

(Did I miss any derivative worn-out stereotyped plot lines?)
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #10 on: September 07, 2016, 07:07:38 AM »
Racism? Why not re-conceive the retired black guy as a semi-retired fiction writer who moves to a nearly all-white touristy coast town like Aptos, or Eureka in CA or Florence in OR? A black unofficial detective newcomer and an all-white PD or Sheriff Dept. (plus or minus a token minority) would be perfect for the de rigueur conflict between the smart detective and dumb local LEOs. With that set-up CR just needs a good mix of villains and villainous victims (the latter getting long-delayed 9mm karma) in various forms such as a greedy developer wanting to pave Paradise, a loony-hypocrite Fundy preacher, or a local businessman dumping industrial waste for fun and profit (all whites, all racists, of course).

(Did I miss any derivative worn-out stereotyped plot lines?)

Since this is a DUmmy we're talking about, I'll flesh out one of your plots.

A White, Republican megachurch pastor is murdered in his church office. The culprit is a local mixed-race tranny who is actually the pastor's illegitimate son. The tranny went to the church for assistance, and the pastor tried to seduce him/her.

The protagonist (who is also a homosexual vegan) identifies the murderer, and in the process uncovers the town's dark secret: the victim had taken advantage of many poor minority women who came to the church for charity, and he had several mixed-race illegitimate children which he never acknowledged.

The protagonist then advocates for the murderer, shames the police chief into dropping charges, and leads a protest against the church. The book ends with the church's board agreeing to close down, sell their assets, and distribute the proceeds to the pastor's bastards as reparations.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #11 on: September 07, 2016, 07:20:39 AM »
It sounds like if 'Blazing Saddles' were a modern drama.

That's what I first thought!!

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"The retired NCIS agent turned sheriff is a (DONG!)"

"What did he say?"

"He said the retired NCIS agent turned sheriff is near."

"No, riken', racken', rackel reekin' rarf. I said the retired NCIS agent turned sheriff is a (DONG)"

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #12 on: September 07, 2016, 07:21:12 AM »
Since this is a DUmmy we're talking about, I'll flesh out one of your plots.

A White, Republican megachurch pastor is murdered in his church office. The culprit is a local mixed-race tranny who is actually the pastor's illegitimate son. The tranny went to the church for assistance, and the pastor tried to seduce him/her.

The protagonist (who is also a homosexual vegan) identifies the murderer, and in the process uncovers the town's dark secret: the victim had taken advantage of many poor minority women who came to the church for charity, and he had several mixed-race illegitimate children which he never acknowledged.

The protagonist then advocates for the murderer, shames the police chief into dropping charges, and leads a protest against the church. The book ends with the church's board agreeing to close down, sell their assets, and distribute the proceeds to the pastor's bastards as reparations.

That certainly is Hollyweird-grade! Not that the DU-member would be appropriately grateful for your assistance.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #13 on: September 07, 2016, 07:31:51 AM »
Racism? Why not re-conceive the retired black guy as a semi-retired fiction writer who moves to a nearly all-white touristy coast town like Aptos, or Eureka in CA or Florence in OR? A black unofficial detective newcomer and an all-white PD or Sheriff Dept. (plus or minus a token minority) would be perfect for the de rigueur conflict between the smart detective and dumb local LEOs. With that set-up CR just needs a good mix of villains and villainous victims (the latter getting long-delayed 9mm karma) in various forms such as a greedy developer wanting to pave Paradise, a loony-hypocrite Fundy preacher, or a local businessman dumping industrial waste for fun and profit (all whites, all racists, of course).

(Did I miss any derivative worn-out stereotyped plot lines?)
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #14 on: September 07, 2016, 07:42:58 AM »
Since this is a DUmmy we're talking about, I'll flesh out one of your plots.

A White, Republican megachurch pastor is murdered in his church office. The culprit is a local mixed-race tranny who is actually the pastor's illegitimate son. The tranny went to the church for assistance, and the pastor tried to seduce him/her.

The protagonist (who is also a homosexual vegan) identifies the murderer, and in the process uncovers the town's dark secret: the victim had taken advantage of many poor minority women who came to the church for charity, and he had several mixed-race illegitimate children which he never acknowledged.

The protagonist then advocates for the murderer, shames the police chief into dropping charges, and leads a protest against the church. The book ends with the church's board agreeing to close down, sell their assets, and distribute the proceeds to the pastor's bastards as reparations.

You need to copyright this! :cheersmate:
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #15 on: September 07, 2016, 10:13:19 AM »
Since this is a DUmmy we're talking about, I'll flesh out one of your plots.

A White, Republican megachurch pastor is murdered in his church office. The culprit is a local mixed-race tranny who is actually the pastor's illegitimate son. The tranny went to the church for assistance, and the pastor tried to seduce him/her.

The protagonist (who is also a homosexual vegan) identifies the murderer, and in the process uncovers the town's dark secret: the victim had taken advantage of many poor minority women who came to the church for charity, and he had several mixed-race illegitimate children which he never acknowledged.

The protagonist then advocates for the murderer, shames the police chief into dropping charges, and leads a protest against the church. The book ends with the church's board agreeing to close down, sell their assets, and distribute the proceeds to the pastor's bastards as reparations.
 
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #16 on: September 07, 2016, 10:34:31 AM »
 
No lesbos?? What's ùp with that?

Shit, you're right.

OK, the preacher's wife is actually a lesbian, and his murder allows her to come out. That makes her the prime suspect at first, until our protagonist points out that oppressed minorities are always innocent.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #17 on: September 07, 2016, 10:39:22 AM »
You need to copyright this! :cheersmate:

And here I was trying to write something more absurd than 50 Shades of Gray set at  a Furry convention.

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #18 on: September 07, 2016, 10:42:50 AM »
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I have written my first crime novel

Ladies and gentleman I have written my first crime novel about a retired NCIS agent who is black who gets appointed sheriff of a small mid-western county built on racism. I will be pitching this on twitter in a couple of days. Please send me pleasant thoughts. My goal is to get not only a book deal but a film or TV deal out of it so I can buy myself a house with a working furnace. Send me your thoughts and prayers and if you happen to have connections in the business I could use that too.

He forgot to mention this retired NCIS agent turned Sheriff is a staunch gun control advocate and does not carry a weapon, you know to lead by example. 
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #19 on: September 07, 2016, 10:49:17 AM »
He forgot to mention this retired NCIS agent turned Sheriff is a staunch gun control advocate and does not carry a weapon, you know to lead by example.

A black Andy Griffith.

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #20 on: September 07, 2016, 10:49:38 AM »
He forgot to mention this retired NCIS agent turned Sheriff is a staunch gun control advocate and does not carry a weapon, you know to lead by example.

If Andy Griffin and Leroy Jethro Gibbs* had a child.

A black child.

**Speaking of Gibbs, everything this DUmbshit thinks he knows about NCIS probably comes from the Tee Vee. Stupid fan-fic DUmbass, anyway.
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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #21 on: September 07, 2016, 11:08:34 AM »
It sounds like if 'Blazing Saddles' were a modern drama.
Libs really do see racism everywhere they look.

Or, just invent it!
              

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #22 on: September 07, 2016, 11:10:20 AM »
If Andy Griffin and Leroy Jethro Gibbs* had a child.

A black child.


              

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« Reply #23 on: September 07, 2016, 11:12:32 AM »
He forgot to mention this retired NCIS agent turned Sheriff is a staunch gun control advocate and does not carry a weapon, you know to lead by example.



Hey, now.  That's my schtick.
              

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Re: Proglodyte pretty stoked to have rewritten "In the Heat of the Night"
« Reply #24 on: September 07, 2016, 11:20:10 AM »
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I have written my first crime novel

Ladies and gentleman I have written my first crime novel about a retired NCIS agent who is black who gets appointed sheriff of a small mid-western county built on racism.

Well, at least you got the jurisdiction right, but appointments to fill a vacant office are pretty short-term, usually just until the next election cycle, or sometimes until an earlier special election.  And just FWIW, I've dealt with CID, NCIS, and OSI, they are NOTHING like the televised version in any way.
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