I am going to kill you. I am going to end your life, but rather than allow you the privilege of haunting the normal, where you might find some small comfort in staying connected to the bliss you once knew, you shall haunt the insane, where the hell you are about to experience for eternity will seem orgasmic compared to the inhuman suffering you are now damned to dream of every night.
The unbearable pain of your reality will be your only relief from the unspeakable horrors you will experience in your sleep.
The unbearable pain of your reality will be your only relief from the unspeakable horrors you will experience in your sleep.
wow, that is very "gripping" (sorry, not a literary genius). It did get my heart pumping reading it. :cheersmate:
and this last line.......
soooooooooooo good. Might need to save for future use :-)
I definitely wouldn't let just any Hollywierdo read that line: a Linda Hamilton/Tom Hanks/Patrick Stewart character could pull it off. From a Russell Crowe character - as one example - it would destroy the mood you appear to be trying to set.
True torture? Make your victim BEG for death. Truly desire it. Then deny it.
I like to just blow shit up, and regard Schwarzeneger's "Solly, remember ven I said I vould kill you last? I lied" as elegantly concise dialog, so take this with a grain of salt, but the last half of the first paragraph seems to get just a wee bit ponderous.
Oh HELL no (pardon the pun)...I'm just trying to conceive of a fate worse than that of hell itself...of a hatred so deep, it consigns the victim to a fantasy world where eternal, unimaginable pain isn't enough to satisfy the bloodlust of our protaganist.
As always, I'm logging to go one step further than is probably appropriate. :-)
Oh HELL no (pardon the pun)...I'm just trying to conceive of a fate worse than that of hell itself...of a hatred so deep, it consigns the victim to a fantasy world where eternal, unimaginable pain isn't enough to satisfy the bloodlust of our protaganist.
As always, I'm logging to go one step further than is probably appropriate. :-)
I like it. It definitely sets a tone. I haven't seen any of the Hellraiser stuff, but I was reminded of a scene in "What Dreams May Come" when I read it. A lot of suffering. LOTS of suffering.
"and to think.............. I hesitated" *
*The Doctor from HR 2 who becomes a Cenobite.
That was, at the time, the CREEPIEST, SCARIEST and MOST DISTURBING scenes I had EVER seen!!!!
Clive Barker is one of the best horror writers to have ever lived. Almost on par with Lovecraft.
I am going to kill you. I am going to end your life, but rather than allow you the privilege of haunting the normal, where you might find some small comfort in staying connected to the bliss you once knew, you shall haunt the insane, where the hell you are about to experience for eternity will seem orgasmic compared to the inhuman suffering you are now damned to dream of every night.
The unbearable pain of your reality will be your only relief from the unspeakable horrors you will experience in your sleep.
No, I am not going to kill you. I am going to curse you, damn you to an existence of eternal suffering. I am going to cut you off from the light and love of the world, from your wealth and your power. I am going to cast you into the dark where you shall live as those you have so callously treated, your mind a raging torrent of memories of what you no longer posses.
You will be unloved, impotent, foul, and corrupt. Pain, fear, betrayal, and hatred will be your constant companions.
You will scream and cry for mercy but you shall find none; the only answer to your prayers will be laughter.
With these words I re-christen you "David", and you shall come to know me as "Nathan".
No, I am not going to kill you. I am going to curse you, damn you to an existence of eternal suffering. I am going to cut you off from the light and love of the world, from your wealth and your power. I am going to cast you into the dark where you shall live as those you have so callously treated, your mind a raging torrent of memories of what you no longer posses.
You will be unloved, impotent, foul, and corrupt. Pain, fear, betrayal, and hatred will be your constant companions.
You will scream and cry for mercy but you shall find none; the only answer to your prayers will be laughter.
With these words I re-christen you "David", and you shall come to know me as "Nathan".
Ok wasp....tell me the truth, now....where did that come from???? I don't think I've heard it before, but it's brilliant and seems kinda familiar somehow.
Ok wasp....tell me the truth, now....where did that come from???? I don't think I've heard it before, but it's brilliant and seems kinda familiar somehow.
Straight outta my head, good sir. When I read yours, it kind of made me think of the story of King David and Bathsheba. Nathan was the prophet who delivered the Lord's message to the philandering king and his life became completely screwed.
You can read it here (http://www.mechon-mamre.org/p/pt/pt08b12.htm#1).
Personally, I could not think of any worse fate than to be cut off from the light and love of God and the twisting of my mind, body, and soul that would follow (ie turn into a howling liberal). If I were to curse someone to an eternal damnation, it would look a lot like that and it felt like that was what you were going for.
I think up wordy shit like that all of the time. It's one of my many useless talents that doesn't pay the bills.
And, for the record, you are free to use that however you may wish, sir, free of charge.
Just don't forget me in the credits. :-)
Sir, I am utterly impressed. THAT'S good stuff, man - trying to imagine the worst possible fate your eternal soul would have to endure. At least physically, you know you will cease to feel pain at some point, but consider the form of eternal suffering that the pain receptors of your soul would be compelled to experience, and you can come up with all SORTS of notions that make our mortal coils twist in fear! :-)
So am I to deduce that you liked it? :-)
:cheersmate: :yahoo: :lol:
Would you like more?
That's a freakin' loaded question, if ever I've seen one. :bolt:
Actually MSB, someone I knew and had no reason to doubt once told me of something extremely similar, albeit in a much less clinical setting, happening to a captured double agent in a Southeast Asian country that will remain nameless.The sensory deprivation tank or the surgical imposition thereof?
The permanent kind.
Lead usually makes things permanent.So shallow.
So shallow.
So banal.
For some death is an escape from what they truly deserve.
For some death has to be earned...
...by many, many nights of begging.
Not bad at all.
I definitely wouldn't let just any Hollywierdo read that line: a Linda Hamilton/Tom Hanks/Patrick Stewart character could pull it off. From a Russell Crowe character - as one example - it would destroy the mood you appear to be trying to set.
My vote is for an Anthony Hopkins type.
I love Sir Anthony, but I was thinking more along the lines of a Michael Gambon or Tom Wilkinson.
Meh, smooth talking British bad guys are too predictable.
Good known bad guys for what you are driving at would be Willem Dafoe or maybe Christopher Walken. If you were looking for an unexpected type who could deliver a range of evil dead pan, laughing sociopath, and raving demon, I can suggest two:
Lemmy
(http://thedarkstyle.files.wordpress.com/2008/09/lemmy.jpg)
Blackie Lawless
(http://www.sleazeroxx.com/interviews/blackielawless4.jpg)
I'm working on a scene, and I would be very grateful for your opinions on whether or not this would rank among one of the most beautiful, elegantly dreadful and effective final statements ever concocted.He says he's gonna kill him, then says he's doomed to haunt the insane, is this killer like god or somethin? Coz how can he be sure what happen to the killed one after he's dead?
I'm hesitant to give you any clue as to story context, because I want it to seem as credible coming from a normal (albeit sociopathic) human being, as it would an immortal demon.
Thanks so much for whatever "notes" you could give me. :-)
PS - Please feel free to submit your re-writes.
LEMMY!!!!!! :cheersmate: