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Offline shadeaux

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Night Street
« on: March 17, 2010, 10:48:41 PM »
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CaliforniaPeggy  (1000+ posts)        Wed Mar-17-10 11:40 PM

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Night Street

smooth black

empty

dark


I am alone
gregorian
chant
in solitude

earth turning
over


I see

only darkness



© 2010 MLC
 


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Re: Night Street
« Reply #1 on: March 17, 2010, 10:53:07 PM »
Good lord.

What does that even mean? Is it about being a $10 hooker for Taverner or something?
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #2 on: March 17, 2010, 11:04:56 PM »
Very similar in style to this.

I bought an RC cola
some chips
walked past the grave
yard with
Mary on the
stone
tapped
on the
fence of
Uncle
I sat and
drank a beer
I stood to go
while Morley his
friend said no
I had a joint
and
a few swigs
of whiskey
and
wandered
home
past the
Virgin Mary  Curious
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #3 on: March 17, 2010, 11:15:23 PM »
The proper response every time the CalPig passes a poem:

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Don't get me wrong - her poetry isn't bad.  It's awful.  It's the kind of thing that would blind God if He had to read it.  It's a collection of words that should be machine-gunned down, one by one, preferably out in the desert, with no witnesses, and a nice young girl who could be counted on to claim that she'd been shooting jackrabbits.  It's so bad, mirrors crack if anyone looking into a mirror while thinking of one of CP's poems runs the risk of permanent scarring, even blindness, while thinking of it as he peers into the mirror.

Her poetry needs immolation.  She needs to have all writing impletments and keyboards, paper, blank walls, toilet paper, paper towels, margins in newspapers, and even the blank part of framed works of art removed from her home until this idea that she's writing "poetry" passes.  Maybe medication will help.

Awful poem sucking.
Suck, suck, suck, suck.
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #4 on: March 18, 2010, 05:56:06 AM »
looks up 'Vogon poetry'...

  • Vogon poetry is now the fourth worst poetry in all the galaxy...
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #5 on: March 18, 2010, 06:22:44 AM »
ROSES

are red

VIOLETS

are blue

MONICA

she blew

C-PIG

U do 2





Needs more work...I know...still kindda half-ass sounds like a poem.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #6 on: March 18, 2010, 08:06:05 AM »
Quote from: FGL on March 17, 2010, 10:53:07 PM
Good lord.

What does that even mean?

Sounds like she paid a visit to the space between her ears.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #7 on: March 18, 2010, 08:07:06 AM »
Ya'll mind if'n I try my hand at this here poetry thing?


Dark Street

bumpy kinda asphalt-ish color

vacant

pitchass black


ain't nobody here
burping
farting
in isolation

wino turning
over

can't see a ******* thing

stubbed my toe

ouch.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #8 on: March 18, 2010, 08:20:08 AM »
Marshall, that there is some damn fine poetry.  Perhaps you could copyright it! 
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #9 on: March 18, 2010, 08:27:40 AM »
Quote from: Karin on March 18, 2010, 08:20:08 AM
Marshall, that there is some damn fine poetry.  Perhaps you could copyright it! 


Naw, I ain't copied it, I righted it myself.
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #10 on: March 18, 2010, 08:32:52 AM »
There should be a required notice in the title line warning that a attempt at poetry by C-Peg  is inside. :hammer:
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #11 on: March 18, 2010, 08:44:21 AM »
Quote from: Tucker on March 18, 2010, 08:32:52 AM
There should be a required notice in the title line warning that a attempt at poetry by C-Peg  is inside. :hammer:

I'd go along with that.  Sticky, perhaps?
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #12 on: March 18, 2010, 09:14:43 AM »
Quote from: Happy Fun Ball on March 18, 2010, 05:56:06 AM
looks up 'Vogon poetry'...

  • Vogon poetry is now the fourth worst poetry in all the galaxy...

You took the words right out of my .... er .... keyboard.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #13 on: March 18, 2010, 10:34:50 AM »
Quote from: MarshallLaw on March 18, 2010, 08:07:06 AM
Ya'll mind if'n I try my hand at this here poetry thing?


Dark Street

bumpy kinda asphalt-ish color

vacant

pitchass black


ain't nobody here
burping
farting
in isolation

wino turning
over

can't see a ******* thing

stubbed my toe

ouch.



 :lmao: @you and JohnnyReb both.
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #14 on: March 18, 2010, 10:38:06 AM »
Quote from: MarshallLaw on March 18, 2010, 08:27:40 AM

Naw, I ain't copied it, I righted it myself.

Well, I'll be ding danged!  Some mighty fine po-tree indeed. 
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #15 on: March 18, 2010, 10:41:48 AM »
BWAHAHAHAHA !!!!!

I am DYING over here !    :lmao:


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Re: Night Street
« Reply #16 on: March 18, 2010, 11:07:08 AM »
In the morning

I sit perched

the yawning chasm

in porcelain embrace

straining to remember

Maybe the enchirito?

The habenero salsa?

a roaring whoosh

a thunderous vortice

my sin mocks

the cheap meal

the night before

it leaves me

but not peacefully

set against white

it clawed defiantly

refusing to yield

its spirit lingers

follows me anon

the dog hides

I am ashamed
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #17 on: March 18, 2010, 11:08:20 AM »
Quote from: Mr Snuggle Bunny on March 18, 2010, 11:07:08 AM
In the morning

I sit perched

the yawning chasm

in porcelain embrace

straining to remember

Maybe the enchirito?

The habenero salsa?

a roaring whoosh

a thunderous vortice

my sin mocks

the cheap meal

the night before

it leaves me

but not peacefully

set against white

it clawed defiantly

refusing to yield

its spirit lingers

follows me anon

the dog hides

I am ashamed

Then, you're not a DUmb****.  Otherwise,

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #18 on: March 18, 2010, 11:22:39 AM »
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA  This is one of the funniest threads I've read in a long time.  LOL!  Hell, I can hardly type.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #19 on: March 18, 2010, 11:25:50 AM »
The CalPig's poetry reminds me of that game the kids play where you put nouns, verbs, and adjectives into blanks in a story without being able to see the story. The results are sometimes hilarious, and always better than a bunch of random CalPig words.
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #20 on: March 18, 2010, 11:34:21 AM »
This is why humans invented paper shredders. You couldn't get rid of something that awfull fast enough.
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #21 on: March 18, 2010, 11:37:58 AM »
Quote from: GOBUCKS on March 18, 2010, 11:25:50 AM
The CalPig's poetry reminds me of that game the kids play where you put nouns, verbs, and adjectives into blanks in a story without being able to see the story. The results are sometimes hilarious, and always better than a bunch of random CalPig words.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #22 on: March 18, 2010, 11:43:36 AM »
Quote from: Mr Snuggle Bunny on March 18, 2010, 11:07:08 AM


its spirit lingers

follows me anon

the dog hides

I am ashamed

Oh dear Lord!   :rotf: :rotf: :rotf:
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Re: Night Street
« Reply #23 on: March 18, 2010, 12:20:29 PM »
Quote from: Mr Snuggle Bunny on March 18, 2010, 11:07:08 AM
In the morning

I sit perched

the yawning chasm

in porcelain embrace

straining to remember

Maybe the enchirito?

The habenero salsa?

a roaring whoosh

a thunderous vortice

my sin mocks

the cheap meal

the night before

it leaves me

but not peacefully

set against white

it clawed defiantly

refusing to yield

its spirit lingers

follows me anon

the dog hides

I am ashamed

Brilliant! Better than anything the Ms. Piggy of Poetry ever wrote. I can't believe she actually posts that crap. My chickens are more melodic when they're laying an egg.

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Re: Night Street
« Reply #24 on: March 18, 2010, 12:26:39 PM »
Quote from: MarshallLaw on March 18, 2010, 08:07:06 AM
Ya'll mind if'n I try my hand at this here poetry thing?


Dark Street

bumpy kinda asphalt-ish color

vacant

pitchass black


ain't nobody here
burping
farting
in isolation

wino turning
over

can't see a ******* thing

stubbed my toe

ouch.



I like yours better.  No pseudo-intellectual filter on the meaning.

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